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智课教育精英学习中心 GRE 备考资料 GRE 官方写作题库Argument 16 In surveys, Mason City residents rank water sports (swim , boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years the ave been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should, for that reason, devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. 【满分范文赏析】 While it may be true that the Mason City government ought to devote more money to riverside recreational facilities, the author fails to make an argument for the justification of increased monetary resources based on the potential of increased recreational patronage of the river. It is easy to understand why city residents would want a cleaner river, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to increased funding. 【本段结构】 本文采用了标准的Argument 开头段结构，即C—A—F 的开头结构。本段首先概 括原文的 ，之后简要提及原文为支持其结论所 的一系列 Assumption 及细节，最后给出开头段到正文段的过渡句，指出原文的 Flaw ，即 这些Assumption 无法让原文的结论具有说服力。 【本段功能】 作为 Argument 开头段，本段具体功能就在于发起 并概括原文的结论，即 Mason 应当为沿河游乐设施投入 的金钱。本段接下来提到了原文中为支 持之前的 所提供的证据 人们潜在的水上娱乐以及更干净的河水 质量的需求。文章提及这些 ，为是在正文段中对这些 Assumption 即将进行 的具体 做铺垫。 Citing surveys of