高三公开课读后续写howtopolishyourwriting.ppt

高三公开课读后续写how to polish your writing With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. She forced a smile, saying“Thank you” and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter and said to the girl loudly, “How much have you got to spend?” Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse---two dollars. After thinking for a few seconds, Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. The bell costs two dollars.” The child went out, holding the special bell in her hand. Grade the story Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. He couldn’t believe his ears. The girl stood in the doorway, ringing the bell happily. Then Pappy got close to her and asked, “Have you changed your mind, Miss?” “ No. My Momma says the present is for you.” said the child. Before Pappy had time to say another word, a young woman walked in. She said to Pappy, “Hello, Dad.” How to polish your story? 润色文章的技巧 技 巧 1. 使用较高级的词汇 2. 使用较丰富的句式 3. 使用恰当的连接词 proper conjunctions abundant sentence patterns advanced words and phrases How to polish your words? “小”心思——丰满人物内心 Inner thoughts to portray the figures “小”词汇——增加表达效果 Detailed verbs to make expressions powerful “小”细节——丰富故事情节 Proper adv to enrich your story Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心 悲伤 快乐 2016年10月高考作文 23分 Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心 震惊 2017年6月高考作文 23分 One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① He decided to visit the family. ②But the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found. He only found a splendid house. ③He thought the family might die. Suddenly, a man came out. The monk recognized him. It was the father of the family. So he asked, “ Have you lived here?” Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心 One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① Driven by a sense of regret, he decided to visit the family. ②To his great sur